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First of all, can I just say 'thank you' for valuing my opinion as much as you do? ☺
Strengths: I'm liking the strange world with the walking cities. You have a nice range of character designs, ranging from whacked-out in the case of Nasty and rather elegant in the case of whatever her name is. CeeVee is adorable. <3
Weaknesses: I'll just say it flat out- I'm *not* liking the different speech impediments you've given your cast. It's actually irritating and distracts from the content of the dialogue. (I can understand when it might come in handy, like if two people are talking off-camera and we need to know which is which.) Perhaps it would help if you at least took the time to explain why Gabriel stretches the first vowel of each sentence, etc. (If I were Kara, I probably would've asked him that a long time ago).
Overall: I feel like you're telling an epic-length action story, but it's stymied by the strip format. :\ Not to say you have to start all over so much as take it in a more creative route. People can grasp a good comic plotline pretty fast if done right. A comic relies on the strength of its visuals (esp. in an action/adventure such as yours). It's also better if you worked in larger formats because you can explore your compositions more; right now your full-body shots can only be drawn so large, you know? The inking could also stand to be cleaner (don't use zigzags to shade, man) and color choices could be more calculated, but I say focus on a larger format first and the rest can come after.
Anyway, that's my thoughts on Thirdborn. I sincerely hope it helps.
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cheers
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I believe that our loved ones never truly leave us. And if the need for them comes at desperate times, they find ways to come back to us.
p.s. your community board art reads "thirLdborn". just FYI
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Name: Dangerman-1973
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